Show not Tell - Final Crusader Challenge

Show Not Tell Crusader Challenge: In 300 words or less, write a passage (it can be an excerpt from your WIP, flash fiction, a poem, or any other writing) that shows (rather than tells) the following:

• you're scared and hungry
• it's dusk
• you think someone is following you
• and just for fun, see if you can involve all five senses AND include these random words: shimmer, saccadic, substance, and salt.

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Stumbling like a drunk against the cold stone walls, tripping over things without substance, I fought to  control myself.

She was coming. Had to keep moving, the light shimmered ahead in the doorway like a beacon from Heaven. Heaven before me, hell behind.

The fear clutched at me, tightening my lungs, constricting my heart. Hardly any breath, unsteady legs, stinging salt of tears and sweat trickling into my mouth. Not good enough. The energy was sapping rapidly now, my stomach a gnawing knot of emptiness.

The dimming light, warmth from the sun dying, proof the third day was ending.

Keep going, must keep going.

Resting against the freezing stone wall for a nanosecond, my eyes doing a saccadic dance between the beacon of salvation and the echoing footsteps in the dark. The damp seeps into my pores, fills my nostrils with the stench of my own fear. Not like this, please. I don't want to die.

The echoing steps come closer, a rapid staccato on the concrete ground.

With a strangled cry my legs move of their own accord, pulled by the invisible cord of instinct to safety. Nearly there. If only my legs weren't so wobbly. Damn it, run!

200 words! What do you think?

Crusader Challenge lie

I love Jane Austen and Regency themed stories, though my absolute favs are medieval - Especially written by Julie Garwood.
I DO bite my nails!
I do think bunny rabbits are cute and like all baby animals.
I DON'T like fuliguline! Didn't even know what that word meant, i had to look it up!

Well done, Witless Exposition for guessing!!

First Crusader Challenge - yep i'm a bit late to the party!

so the challenge is:  In 300 words or less, tell us: 

· one secret
· one lie
· one interesting quirk
· one annoying habit
· one of your best character traits, and
· one of your favourite things in the whole world. 

The post can be in any format, including poetry (for those poets among us), but must include the random words, “bloviate,” “fuliguline,” “rabbit,” and “blade” (tee hee).
Finish your post with something along the lines of, “I may have revealed something about me that isn’t strictly true, can you guess what it is?” (this last bit isn’t included in the word count). And don’t forget to tell us the answer in your next post!

So i am a graduate with an English literature degree and i just love to bloviate about all the best authors out there that have paved our literature course. I especially love Jane Austen and have a love for Romance reads with a Regency theme. And if they contain anything to do with fuliguline, it just makes it better.

But, if i find i am lost in the pages of a story my nails are cut to the quick, not by a blade but my teeth.

One of my favourite things in the whole world are baby animals. Yes even the bunny rabbits! The cute cuddly things with giant feet and can be pets - so adorable!!

I would love to be able to write a story set in the Medieval period. I can't get enough of the stories set in this era, however i'm too lazy to do all that research! I only hope my heroes and heroines make others drift away as i do whilst reading these stories.

I may have revealed something that isn't strictly true. Can you guess what it is? (It's not hard!)

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